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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.
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It is clear from the charts that the
percentage
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 of
degrees
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 granted at the National
University
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 in computer science increased the most between the four different fields that are presented on the charts. In 1990 the field with the most granted
degrees
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 at the National
University
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 was business. Since
then
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, the
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 of granted business
degrees
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 decreased. By 2010 the
percentage
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 of granted
degrees
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 in business dropped
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 15%. The
percentage
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 of granted
degrees
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 in 2000 in law slightly decreased
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 5% in comparison to 1990. After 1990 it rose
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 5% and in the year 2010 was the same as it was in 1990. The
percentage
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 of granted medicine
degrees
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 in 2000 slightly increased
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 5% in comparison to 1990. It reached its peak in 2000. After 2000 it decreased
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 5% and in the year 2010 was the same as it was in 1990. The field that had
the
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 significant ascent in granted
degrees
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 at the National
University
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 was computer science. In 1990 the
percentage
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 of granted
degrees
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 in
computer
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the computer
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 science field at the National
University
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 was 30%. Since
then
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 it increased
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 15%.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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