Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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Different
people
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argue that it is important to keep your house and workplace clean with organised
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around you. My opinion is that
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is true
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because it can
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you with work or study.
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,
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would like to say that
people
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really need to organise their
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correctly, because it helps to work or study quicker than when it is
mess
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around you. There is an
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that if
home
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the home
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is clean,
mind
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will be clean too.
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there
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people
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for whom easier to have a lot of things not in their places.
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often it
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of
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human’s
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profession
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like
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arts or chiefs.
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Nevertheless
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when the workplace is tidy,
people
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do not spend a lot of time
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their stuff. For students it will be better,
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of
clean
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mind, they would remember more information than with the mess in their
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.
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tidy
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home has
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a big
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affect
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on
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the human’s
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human’s
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mind and health.
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example
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if
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a man
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has a lot of dust in his flat, it will be harmful
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his body.
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it can cause
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diseases
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like cancer or tuberculosis.
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Likewise
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human
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can catch an infection, and transfer
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it to
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other
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.
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way epidemics and pandemics appear.
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addition
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people
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who prefer to live
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,
firstly
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need to clean their own
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and
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clean all their stuff, like pens or mobile
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. Especially
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hygiene
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places to secure humans health In
conclusion
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I can say that it is really important to have
clean
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a clean
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room and your
space
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, not only for your work
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but
also
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for your health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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