Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?
Different
people
argue that it is important to keep your house and workplace clean with organised space
around you. My opinion is that this
is true,
because it can Remove the comma
apply
helps
you with work or study.
Change the verb form
help
Firstly
, i
would like to say that Change the capitalization
I
people
really need to organise their space
correctly, because it helps to work or study quicker than when it is mess
around you. There is an Correct article usage
a mess
argue
that if Replace the word
argument
home
is clean, Add an article
the home
a home
mind
will be clean too. Add an article
the mind
On the other hand
there some
Add a missing verb
are some
people
for whom easier to have a lot of things not in their places. In addition
often it dependents
Replace the word
depends
of
Change preposition
on
human’s
Change noun form
human
profession
likeFix the agreement mistake
professions
:
arts or chiefs. Remove the comma
apply
Nevertheless
when the workplace is tidy, Add a comma
,Nevertheless
people
do not spend a lot of time to find
their stuff. For students it will be better, Change the verb form
finding
as a result
of clean
mind, they would remember more information than with the mess in their Correct article usage
a clean
space
.
However
tidy
home has Correct article usage
a tidy
big
Add an article
a big
affect
on Replace the word
effect
Correct article usage
the human’s
human’s
mind and health. Change noun form
human
For
example
if Add a comma
,example
man
has a lot of dust in his flat, it will be harmful Add an article
a man
the man
for
his body. Change the preposition
to
Moreover
it can cause Add a comma
,Moreover
disease
like cancer or tuberculosis. Change the noun form
diseases
Likewise
Add a comma
,Likewise
human
can catch an infection, and transfer Fix the agreement mistake
humans
to
other Correct pronoun usage
it to
people
. This
way epidemics and pandemics appear. In
addition
Add a comma
,addition
people
who prefer to live healthy
, Change the word
healthily
firstly
need to clean their own space
and secondly
clean all their stuff, like pens or mobile phone
. Especially Fix the agreement mistake
phones
observe
hygiene Wrong verb form
observing
public
places to secure humans health
In Change preposition
in public
conclusion
I can say that it is really important to have Add a comma
,conclusion
clean
room and your Add an article
a clean
space
, not only for your work,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
for your health.Submitted by natshar on
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