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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, we have a lot of fast
food
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 brands,
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 as McDonald's which is a brand that sells Burgers, nuggets and french fried, making
people
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's behaviour now easier than before.
this
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 type of
food
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 carries both positive and negative to
people
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 who eat it.
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 essay will be discussing two sides between the positive and the negative that
people
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 get from it. According to society's behaviour, obviously seen that many new generation
people
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 have to do everything quickly so
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 kind of
food
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 is fit in with their lifestyle. Fast
food
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such
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 as Burgers, french fried and fried chicken is the one of choices that many modern
people
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 choose when they are hungry because
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 type of
food
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 is cooked very fast.
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, these foods are
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 known as Junk
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 because they do not have enough nutrition and when you eat them too much, it can cause many health problems.
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,
people
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 who eat Burgers for every meal might get an Obesity problem. To sum up, we can not be denied that Junk
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such
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 as french fried, nuggets are
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that is
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 more
convenience
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 and can make your life do not have to waste your time waiting too long, which is a positive side of it.
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, it
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 has a negative side,
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 kind of
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 carries many health problems for a person who eats it too much.
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