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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Does the advantage of this for individuals outweigh the disadvantage for the environment?

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In the modern era, as many nations are advancing people are buying and using vehicles more frequently. To my knowledge,
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 trend has got a deteriorating impact on mother nature more than self convenience, a few pros and cons related to
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 are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
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 with, talking about uses of purchasing the car at the personal level , undoubtedly it has added towards personal convenience, owing to the fact that one can use it regardless of the time and place. Adding more,
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 trend has certainly helped people to uplift their living standards because society thinks that only a well-off individual can have personal machinery.
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, the bad effects it has on the environment,
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 and foremost, many trees have been cut down , in order to construct roads, which has disrupted the ecosystem greatly. To illustrate, according to a survey report by WHO 17 per cent of the green area has been removed in the
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 two decades just for the sake of highway expansions.
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, mankind is suffering from many ailments that are caused by the pollutants emitted by the vehicles
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 as asthma, lung diseases and so on.
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, the earth is facing a global warming crisis
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 a causative factor for many environmental changes.
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, a few parts of the world are facing the worst droughts while others are facing heavy rainfalls owing to global warming
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 mainly caused by pollution and cars
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 contribute towards it. To conclude, there is no harm in buying and driving cars as far as they are serving humans but when it starts impacting the surrounding
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 essential for living a healthy life
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 we need to give deep thought to the use of machinery.
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