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over populationis the world's most serious environmental problem to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#populationis #world
in recent years, plenty of
people
 believe the rising population has become a major concern to the environmental earth. I fully agree with
this
 issue and in the following essay, I will explain my reasons. in the beginning, as the global population increases, more food is needed,
thus
people
 deforestation to open land for plant foods, and the consequence, is turned to reduced ability to capture CO2 in the air.
however
,
this
 gains the greenhouse gas problem.
also
 risk the loss of habitat and extinction.
moreover
, overpopulation means more
people
 on earth and rising consumption on a daily basis.
for instance
, fuel-consuming unreliable energy consistently obviously gives damages the environment and causes a global disaster. the crucial is
people
 perhaps lose a sufficient environment to live in
also
 leads the diseases. in summary, the
next
 generation cannot be experiencing nature like us, and
also
 do not have the chance to see face-by-face extinct animals.
however
, restoring the damage on earth and making it be the same again almost possible.
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