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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation

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It is hard to deny that buying a house is better than renting one.
Such
 a fact leads impressionable people to generate the opinion that the public thinks it is very important to own a home.
However
,
such
 a fact suffers both logically and facilities and should be examined meticulously. As far as the economy and environment are concerned, I strongly hold that
this
 is a negative situation for spending money to own a home.
First
 and foremost, the economy is the most important resource to support a person's normal life. To be more specific, if the salary that just enough to buy meals or spend on transportation even the electricity fee, there won’t be left any wage to save for a home.
As a result
, the residents who want to keep more cash in their pockets will need to work harder even work overtime for the additional payments.
However
, the unusual daily life will cause diseases, which is a negative situation that a person without healthy and saving.
Furthermore
, the fact that the environment is adding more pressure on everyone, increases the price of items but without any change in salaries. To be more specific, there are many professionals around us, which have better abilities or more experiences that would give us stress and let us frustrated.
As a result
, the public will think about people who have lots of wealth will be richer and the people who are in the middle level will not change or even become downward. In nutshell maintains that having large savings are not easy for everyone. No matter buy expensive products or houses, they will become pressure on the population who has a limited salary. I believe that it is a negative idea, which spending money on houses
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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