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Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis

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Walking is the best way for
people
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 to get rid of many health problems. Walking affects
people
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's health in many ways. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages of walking outweigh the disadvantages.
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, in
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 I will discuss the
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 why
people
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 do not walk today and
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finally
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 I will suggest encouraging
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 to walk.
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, critics may point out that one of the most significant drawbacks of less walking is an increase in certain health problems. Chorostol, diabetics and
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are
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 obese.
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 is because their body gets less exercise. There are other
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 why
people
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 don't like walking. Most importantly,
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schools
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,
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, shops and hospitals are far away from their homes.
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, a large number of
people
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 use vehicles. For that reason,
people
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 use their own vehicles to travel short distances.
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, the newspaper in Australia noted that car users have increased while the predecessors of the modern world have decreased.
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, nowadays
people
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 are used to a very busy life. So he goes to work in the morning and comes back home in the evening.
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, they lead a tiring lifestyle. For
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peoples
people
 do not like to walk.
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,
people
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 use vehicles to travel. There are many solutions to the above problems. The
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 solution is that we can park within walking distance of shops, schools, hospitals and shopping centres.
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, we can create a park with walking lines. Encouraging
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 to walk even when they have leisure time. Of course, we can broadcast ads about the benefits of walking. In my own opinion, I think walking is a good habit for
people
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 to do their prime time. Nowadays
people
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 do not like to vulji for many
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. But for those
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 we can provide a good solution.
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