Serious violent crimes among people who are under- 18 are becoming more common. Some people think that children who commit serious crimes should be treated like adults, while others would say they should be rehabilitated. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Grave criminal offences among minors are more often. Others argued that
who
carry out Correct pronoun usage
those who
this
violence should be of the same penalty like
adults to ensure the Change preposition
as
victims
are given justice. I,
believe they are not old enough to think of the consequence of the crime committed and Remove the comma
apply
therefore
, rehabilitation is the best option.
On the one hand, treating juvenile
like Fix the agreement mistake
juveniles
grown- ups
for the atrocities committed would give justice to the Correct your spelling
grown-ups
victims
and families. Someone who has lost a loved one would find it more unacceptable seeing
the culprit set free. Change the verb form
to see
In addition
, it will inculcate in the minds of the other kids that it is acceptable to commit crimes because they are under legal age
. Furthermore
, It would be a safer world if all the perpetrator
are sanctioned equally. Fix the agreement mistake
perpetrators
For example
, recently, there is a sensational case happened
in the US where an underage boy brought a gun to Correct pronoun usage
that happened
the
school and deliberately shoot and killed a lot of students. Correct article usage
a
However
, I believe age
should be considered because they are still immature and not fully develop
as human beings and Wrong verb form
developed
therefore
should be rehabilitated in the correctional facility until legal age
.
On the other hand
, children who commited
Correct your spelling
committed
commit
this
violent acts should not be treated Correct determiner usage
these
the
same level Change preposition
at the
with
adults. Whereas, these youngsters are still under the responsibility of their guardians because they are not old enough to decide for themselves. Change preposition
as
Hence
, sometimes they commited
a fatal injury resulting Correct your spelling
committed
commit
to
death which in the Change preposition
in
first
place they dont
know the consequence of that matter. Correct your spelling
don't
For instance
, in Correct article usage
the Philippines
Philippines
a law was enacted to protect the rights of the person who committed Add a comma
,Philippines
henious
crimes Correct your spelling
heinous
heinously
for
minors under legal Change preposition
against
age
. I,
believe children should be given the Remove the comma
apply
second
chance to reform and be a good citizens
of the future.
In conclusion, Correct the article-noun agreement
good citizens
a good citizen
although
sending young criminals to penalized
as adults brings justice to the Add a missing verb
be penalized
victims
. The criminals are also
victims
themselves because they are unaware of the crime comitted
. Correct your spelling
committed
Nonetheless
, motivating them to be a
role model is the preferred option.Correct article usage
apply
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