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YouYou have recently purchased a piece of furniture, but you noticed a problem when it was delivered to you. Write a letter to the store manager and say what the problem is, how it must happened in your opinion, what you suggest the manager should do to resolve the problem.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to complain about a defective piece of furniture which I noticed when I received it. It was a wooden
table
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 of square shape and had a
glass
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 in the middle of it. In reality, the
table
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 had an aesthetic appearance but there was a problem
that
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the
glass
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 had broken and was of inferior quality with no design which
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 diminished the
overall
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 look of
a
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table
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.
According to
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 me, it must be a little bit big size so that it should
be
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fit in my room.
Apart from
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this
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, the quality of
glass
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 should be superior with a modern design which can give it
to
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a sleek finish. I found it most unsatisfactory. I would appreciate it if you
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 resolve
this
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 issue. As a solution, I would suggest that
glass
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 should be replaced with epoxy resin
as well as
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 an innovative design which would definitely make it durable and give a unique touch to
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table
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the table
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.
However
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, I have no issue with the size. I,
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, request to repair it as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Gurpreet.

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task achievement
The introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter, but adding a bit more detail about when the delivery occurred and who it was from would provide better context.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea more distinctively. For example, separating the description of the problem and the suggested solution into clearer sections could enhance clarity.
task achievement
Consider making your tone slightly more formal by replacing phrases like 'I found it most unsatisfactory' with something like 'I was disappointed with the quality.'
positive
The letter maintains a polite tone throughout, which is excellent for formal correspondence.
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You clearly identify the main issue and provide a thoughtful suggestion for resolution, demonstrating good problem-solving skills.
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