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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that schools can teach young
people
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 a great amount of knowledge. While some
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 tend towards the viewpoint that conducting courses on good
parents
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’
skills
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 in school would be a waste of
time
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, I would have to support the idea being taught to be a good
parent
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 is beneficial for us. On the one hand, it is understandable for some
people
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 to believe that it is unnecessary for pupils to have classes on how to be good
parents
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.
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 is because for the majority of them, giving an outstanding academic performance is taken a priority. Add to that, whether young
people
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 become
parents
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 in the future is an uncertain factor. So, the
parents
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’
skills
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 courses would take their
time
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 which could be used in other fields interested .
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, schools fail to achieve their original purpose, generating unreasonable resource allocation.
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, it is more convincing for me that studying a brand new kind of lesson is a brilliant experience, and it would be an innovative perspective for schools to teach each young person how to be a good
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.
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, most of the
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 in school, we’re expected to achieve excellent scores in different subjects, and it is inevitable for us to feel bored surrounded by the serious as well as traditional academic atmosphere.
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, there are many changeable issues in future, those
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 not intended to become
parents
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 may change their ideas one day. As we know, being a good
parent
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 needs many
skills
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, which are full of challenges. If mastering the techniques of
parents
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’ domain in advance, it would be more efficient to tackle some problems,
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 as patience with kids, eating habits of distinct stages and rest
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 which
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 the key considerate
skills
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 to become a good
parent
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. In conclusion,
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 existing some disadvantages to
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 courses, it seems to me that young
people
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 can be benefited from the school’s plan a lot.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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