In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, urban
areas
are the destination for many Use synonyms
country
Use synonyms
people
, Use synonyms
as a result
, the number of Linking Words
people
who live outside the Use synonyms
cities
is dropping. In my opinion, Use synonyms
this
will have a negative impact on the economy of the state and will affect the social life in the rural Linking Words
areas
.
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First,
the vast majority of the Linking Words
Use synonyms
country
Change noun form
country's
people
work in agriculture, they have a huge effect on the economy. Their knowledge Use synonyms
in
farming and experience could create relations with other countries, as they will export their good products. Change preposition
of
For example
, raising camels in Linking Words
Use synonyms
country
Correct article usage
the country
people
has opened a new door for Australia in trading with Use synonyms
the
Middle Eastern countries, as they eat camels and use them in some sports. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, the goods consumption will increase, but the production will decrease because the farmers have left their farms to live in the Linking Words
cities
.
Use synonyms
Secondly
, Linking Words
due to
the continuous decrease in the quantity of the Linking Words
Use synonyms
country
Change noun form
country's
people
, the social side will fade away in rural parts. The farmers will start to lose their connection with each other because of the Use synonyms
Use synonyms
cities
hectic life. Change noun form
city's
For instance
, many rural Linking Words
people
have begun to depend on machines more, as many of the Use synonyms
people
that they know have travelled to live in urban Use synonyms
areas
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, a large amount of the Linking Words
country
Use synonyms
people
will start to think about living in the Use synonyms
cities
, seeking to have friends and relations.
In conclusion, I believe that the idea of leaving the rural Use synonyms
areas
to live in the Use synonyms
cities
is not a privilege, and will damage the Use synonyms
country
financially and will break the connections between Use synonyms
country
Use synonyms
people
which will create a weak community.Use synonyms
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