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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays with improvements in the transportation system, international travelling is easier than before. But the number of
people
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 who rather travel to a place in their own
country
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 is increasing and I agree with that.
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, travelling to a distant
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 is easier with advancements in transport vehicles like Aeroplan and cruise ships but due to some problems
people
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 rather travel in their own
country
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for example
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, nowadays
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 have a busier life than before and they have to work harder due to financial problems and travelling to another
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 cost a lot for them and it seems like a vacation for rich
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,
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 another reason is that there the difficulty of getting a visa permit from visa administration and providing the documents required is a long process.
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 getting a visa from some countries could be easy there is the problem of understanding the language of other countries
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 and it might be frustrating for some
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. Even though there are good travelling agencies available and they can provide a good service, and
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 great discounts for tours some
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 rather spend the holidays with their families in their own
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 because providing tickets and booking accommodation for all family members would make their holiday expenses. In conclusion, I think travelling abroad for a holiday is turning into an elite form of vacation and only
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 who are rich can do it and with the financial problems most of the society rather take their vacation in their own
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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  • heritage sites
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