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Some people say that the government should stop TV and Newspaper from showing crimes because media coverage of violent crimes is frightening people and encouraging criminals. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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In the present day with the development of modern technology communication modes
also
 developed. Like newspapers, televisions and mobile phones are the most common communication methods used modern world. By using those modes
people
 know about worldwide
news
. Sometimes they telecast
crimes
 and violent
news
. It affects society in many ways. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages of
news
 about
crimes
 outweigh the drawback.
However
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essay I will discuss both views and
finally
 give my own opinion. On the other ,hand critics may point out that, One of the most significant drawbacks of showing
crimes
 through television or newspaper is the effect on
people
's minds. Because, when elder
people
 and children watch the
news
 and they think about it more and more. Sometimes they are afraid to watch that
news
.
Hence
, It damages children's and elders' mental health.
Furthermore
,
people
 are referring to
crimes
 as experiments. From that reduce the fire to do the crime.
On the other hand
, there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. One of the most preponderant ones is that
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 it gives good feedback to young
people
 about what happened
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 when we did
crimes
. They learn about the bad consequences of doing
crimes
. When they did
crimes
 they should face bad situations. So they got rod to do the
crimes
. And
also
people
 got a good idea about the offender. So it helps to
people
 take care of their relatives. In conclusion,
Crimes
 affect society in various ways. The media is showing those crime has positive and negative consequences. In view of the argument outlined above, one can conclude that despite having some drawbacks the benefits of showing
crimes
 using media in society are indeed too dire to ignore.
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