Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Today
people
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are increasingly raising the issue of hunger in
Africa
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and Middle East
countries
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. Opinions have been divided, one considers that literacy should solve the
problem
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, while according to others the help can be provided by humanitarian assistance. In
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particular case, I agree with the
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group,
who
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says that
food
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aid is more necessary.
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essay will cover both sides of the matter. On the one
hand
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educating
people
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so they could find a solution to defeat starvation is important, but it is extremely
time consuming
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and
people
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in undeveloped
countries
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can not afford to wait.
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Also
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literacy can not give any warranty, but still costs a lot of time and money for education and research. To perform that, a multiple
of
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causes should be studied,
for
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instance
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poverty,
low
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the low
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economy of certain
countries
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,
food
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shortage, climate changes and how
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the conflict
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between
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food providing
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food-providing
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countries
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affect
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this
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problem
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.
On the other
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hand
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it is happening at the present moment so doing whatever we can in the main time is necessary. Today
people
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from every corner of the map are uniting to help to fight world hunger. There are organizations that voluntarily assist to eliminate
this
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problem
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by creating charity funds and developing applications.
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, there are two main apps like ShareTheMeal and ChowBerry, that make supporting
fight
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with
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against
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hunger easier and
convenient
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more convenient
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. In conclusion, it can hardly be denied that studying a
problem
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helps
solving
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the issue. But actions should be taken today and majorly by providing
food
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aids
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aid
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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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