Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Today
people
are increasingly raising the issue of hunger in
Africa
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and Middle East
countries
. Opinions have been divided, one considers that literacy should solve the
problem
, while according to others the help can be provided by humanitarian assistance. In
this
particular case, I agree with the
second
group,
who
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says that
food
aid is more necessary.
This
essay will cover both sides of the matter. On the one
hand
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educating
people
so they could find a solution to defeat starvation is important, but it is extremely
time consuming
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and
people
in undeveloped
countries
can not afford to wait.
Also
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literacy can not give any warranty, but still costs a lot of time and money for education and research. To perform that, a multiple
of
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causes should be studied,
for
instance
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poverty,
low
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the low
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economy of certain
countries
,
food
shortage, climate changes and how
conflict
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the conflict
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between
food providing
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countries
affect
on
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this
problem
.
On the other
hand
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it is happening at the present moment so doing whatever we can in the main time is necessary. Today
people
from every corner of the map are uniting to help to fight world hunger. There are organizations that voluntarily assist to eliminate
this
problem
by creating charity funds and developing applications.
For example
, there are two main apps like ShareTheMeal and ChowBerry, that make supporting
fight
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with
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hunger easier and
convenient
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. In conclusion, it can hardly be denied that studying a
problem
helps
solving
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the issue. But actions should be taken today and majorly by providing
food
aids
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