Using computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that there are more disadvantages in comparison to advantages for juveniles in using
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computer
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daily. I partially agree with
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opinion and accept that there are clear drawbacks of operating gadgets for children,
however
, its benefits
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ignored
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. On the one hand, there are a plethora of problems linked
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excessive
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use of technology
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Firstly
, it adversely
effects
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the personality of children, they become aggressive and annoyed as the rays which
omits
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from the laptops affect their brain and apart from
this
it
also
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their eyesight and backbone.
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, due to the excessive use of electronic devices large percentage of kids between the age of 4 to 12 years are suffering from weak eyesight.
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, they become internet addicted and cannot survive without it,
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mean
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they
also
socialize in the same circle of information technology dependence group which
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generation
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gap.
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, youngsters have no physical activity because of online gaming and virtual socialization with others which is the cause of many health issues
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teenagers.
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,
Pakistan
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health department has reported
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% increase in the backbone diseases of youngsters due to the over usage of
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laptops and other devices.
On the contrary
, the benefits of using automatic devices will be presented now.
To begin
with, it provides assistance in doing assignments and homework
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students and now it is
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compulsory part of
educational
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system, like, projects
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English and science are done mostly by getting reference materials from google.com which is a great source of information for everyone.
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, the understanding of the operating system is
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requirement for
young
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the young
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generation, so that they can compete with the world
otherwise
they will be considered
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. To instantiate, most of the schools in Pakistan
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allowed students to bring their electronic gadgets with them because they get homework electronically. In conclusion, it will not be gainsaid that there are valid arguments on
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both sides of the opinion,
however
, I believe that there should be a balance between the use of technology because now it is the need of the time but
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application should be in limits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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