some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school, Do the advantages of this outweight disadvantages.

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It's clear that being able to speak another
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is vital for every person.
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some people reckon that it's better to learn it in secondary
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but some others prefer primary
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mind compatibility and
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time efficiency dominate. According to numerous
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experiences, children have open minds to learn whatever
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is being told to them
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lessons or a foreign
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many toddlers will learn a
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if they just listen to a cartoon in another
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it's a lot easier for tutors to teach them when they are younger. And that can leads to them
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multilingual
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in a more
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learning is a time-consuming process
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might be really sophisticated to put it in
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, a primary
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student has more leisure time than an older student.
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in a study of
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students, they said that they
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had more time for playing video games when they were
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the previous level. So it can be replaced with some
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new
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it seems to be a better decision to start their learning progress from primary
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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