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Some people believe that studying abroad is important because it expands a person’s knowledge and understanding of the world. Others feel that it is better to study at home because that is the best way to prepare for a career in the student’s own country. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There appears to be a different belief about studying abroad some people think it is important especially in gaining a wider perspective of the
world
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, while others state that our own
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 can provide the education that aligns with
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 here. Both conditions are equally good and depend on the major that
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 are going to take.
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' skills both in social and development.
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, it brings the
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 to a bigger community with various backgrounds
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 leading to
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 view of
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the human
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 being around the
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. Another benefit is the opportunity to benchmark the development from another
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 that the
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 can apply to their land.
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, when studying
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transportation in a sophisticated place
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 as Japan,
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 can learn the citizens'
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 how the
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 succeeded in mobilization.
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, studying at home is not worse than the other one since there are certain majors that are better learned in the home
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. Medicine is one of those majors because each
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 has a different health issue and can not be treated
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 due to many factors.
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, with the developed technology,
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 can actually get a similar curriculum as international
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 despite studying
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 their own
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. The drawback is yet still there
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 as it affects the student's point of view toward the
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 which tends to be smaller than those going overseas. In conclusion, each condition has its own benefits and drawbacks but I agree with the importance to study abroad since a wider knowledge of the
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 is one of the main skills required for a future career or even business.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expand one's horizons
  • cultural immersion
  • language proficiency
  • global perspective
  • educational diversity
  • professional networking
  • local job market
  • career prospects
  • financial burden
  • industry practices
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