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An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose

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Hello dear Ria, I am so glad, to hear that, you are planning to visit my country on vacation. I was on the seventh cloud
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 when I came to know that, you are coming to Canada from Germany on your holidays.
Firstly
, the best time to visit Canada
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 is August to December because at that time, you can explore my country very well.
Secondly
, you can celebrate Halloween and Christmas.
Next,
most of the time the weather is in favourable conditions.
Further
, there are a lot of activities that you can do,
such
 as camping, trekking, boating etc.
Furthermore
, there are ample numbers of tourist attractions, that you can visit.
Moreover
, you can stay with me because
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 my house, I have an extra room available.
Also
, I can help you to explore various places and you do not have to worry about the food too.
However
, when you go to other cities, you can book hotels or Airbnb, they are cheap and convenient.
Although
, I am very excited and eagerly waiting to see you soon. Let me know your plan so I can receive you from the airport. Best wishes Coco.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to maintain consistent punctuation, especially with commas.
Task Achievement
Consider providing more details about specific activities and attractions during the recommended time.
Task Achievement
The letter maintains a warm and friendly tone throughout, suitable for a letter to a friend.
Coherence & Cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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