Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.

These days, several

animals

which live at

sea

have been relocated to some amusement parks for

human’s

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recreation.

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case would give benefits

for

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park visitors who need knowledge and entertainment about

ocean

creatures

,

however

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there are some drawbacks for the

animals

since

artificial

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the artificial

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habitat

is not as comfortable as their natural

habitat

and

sea

creatures

will not feel free. I believe that the disadvantages surpass the advantages.

To begin

with, the relocation of

ocean

creatures

to the animal parks will bring

positive

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impact

for

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human

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humans

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due to

the

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entertainment and

education

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purposes. The presence of

ocean

animals

such

as

dolphin

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dolphins

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and

whale

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in the park will make people can see them directly because they can not see from the

sea

.

Furthermore

, it would give some additional information for the visitors about several knowledge of

animals

in the

ocean

.

For instance

, primary school students go to Amusement

Park

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Parks

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to see and learn about how whales live in their

habitat

.

On the other hand

, forcing

sea

animals

to live outside their natural

habitat

would make them constrained and perhaps they would be stressed and infected with various diseases.

This

condition would make their probability to die quickly increase.

In addition

, if the

animals

are endangered, that would be a big problem since their

extistence

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existence

will disappear completely.

For example

, dolphins can not live in

high temperature

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water like in

the

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animal parks;

hence

the

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dolphin would get suffered.

Thus

, in my point of

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the drawbacks overshadow the benefits. To sum up, relocating

ocean

creatures

to amusement

parkspark

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park park

parks park

dark spark

would give advantages for humans because

sea

creatures

would give additional knowledge for them, while

for

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animals

,

they

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would be uncomfortable and stressed because of the different

habitat

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habitats

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;

therefore

, I believe that the negative impacts outweigh the positive impacts.