some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools . others, however, believe taht boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some countries
experience
separate
education
for
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and
male
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as well as combined, and parents can choose one of them, but it is considered by many that youngsters who educate in same-
gender
schools have drawbacks in the future. I totally agree with
this
suggestion.
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first
look at the problem
such
as lack of
communication
with
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gender
and
then
discuss how
separate
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gender
education
affects success in
education
.
Firstly
, the main obstacle which is caused by same-
gender
education
is that children do not get
experience
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communication
with the opposite
gender
. To put
in
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other words, people who did not have
experience
of
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socializing with
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sex in childhood face
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problems in love relationships in adult life, especially it affects woman
,
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because lack of
experience
in
communication
with men lead to shyness and scaring to talk with men.
For instance
, psychologists say that 85% of women who studied in a female school have a problem in private life with the opposite
gender
.
Secondly
, combined
education
helps children in the studying process. It is argued that
male
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and females have
a
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different thinking and attitude, a woman’s brain is more concentrated and sensitive to the details, while a man's brain responds quickly to incoming information, it means that cooperative learning is a great balance of two different attitudes.
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, there are a lot of collaborations during the studying process, and in
this
combination students of
opposite
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gender
can share
the
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different ideas and get some new
knowledges
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which
lead
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to great achievements in the study. To conclude, some advocate that same-
gender
education
can lead to obstacles in the future, I completely agree with
this
opinion. Shared
education
can cause
the
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problems in future relationships with the opposite
gender
because of
lack
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of
experience
in
communication
, and
moreover
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separate
gender
education
steals from students the opportunity to exchange experiences between students of different genders.
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