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In some countries, Students are required to learn a foreign language. But, in other countries, people believe that they do not have to do so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#countries #students #language #people
Learning an extra
language
 is like two personalities in one body. In a few nations, society
have
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 the mindset that there is no need to learn another
language
, while in other countries,
public
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 believes the opposite.In my opinion,
although
 it depends on the place one resides in ,
however
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 it would be fruitful in many ways for a person if he knows any
language
, which is other than his mother tongue. To commence with, some countries are very resourceful and have almost everything that their citizens need.
Thus
, they do not need to go overseas to find employment which could make them learn a new
language
.
In other words
, it has been seen that
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population
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 from underdeveloped countries are more likely to leave their nations in order to find better jobs and
this
 is the main thing which makes them learn a foreign
language
 to better settle in the new world.
For instance
, in ,Canada there are various immigration programs which attract families from all over the globe to settle in Canada, but,
first
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 they have to prove their Canadian
language
 proficiency. Moving
further
, learning a
second
language
 even apart from the reason for immigration, can help a person to know more about the world, mindsets and cultures.By doing
this
, one can use that skill to enjoy more in his life.
For example
, a person can listen to different tastes in music, can read world-famous authors and
also
 enjoy or feel more while travelling to places.
Hence
, it would benefit oneself at a personal level. In conclusion,
although
 people usually learn a
language
 for migration purposes ,
however
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 it can help an individual in his personal growth as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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