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In some countries, Students are required to learn a foreign language. But, in other countries, people believe that they do not have to do so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#countries #students #language #people
Learning an extra
language
 is like two personalities in one body. In a few nations, society
have
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 the mindset that there is no need to learn another
language
, while in other countries,
public
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 believes the opposite.In my opinion,
although
 it depends on the place one resides in ,
however
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 it would be fruitful in many ways for a person if he knows any
language
, which is other than his mother tongue. To commence with, some countries are very resourceful and have almost everything that their citizens need.
Thus
, they do not need to go overseas to find employment which could make them learn a new
language
.
In other words
, it has been seen that
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population
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 from underdeveloped countries are more likely to leave their nations in order to find better jobs and
this
 is the main thing which makes them learn a foreign
language
 to better settle in the new world.
For instance
, in ,Canada there are various immigration programs which attract families from all over the globe to settle in Canada, but,
first
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 they have to prove their Canadian
language
 proficiency. Moving
further
, learning a
second
language
 even apart from the reason for immigration, can help a person to know more about the world, mindsets and cultures.By doing
this
, one can use that skill to enjoy more in his life.
For example
, a person can listen to different tastes in music, can read world-famous authors and
also
 enjoy or feel more while travelling to places.
Hence
, it would benefit oneself at a personal level. In conclusion,
although
 people usually learn a
language
 for migration purposes ,
however
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 it can help an individual in his personal growth as well.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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