Some people suggest that bringing up children by the whole family includimg uncles, aunts and grandparents is better, rather than only by parents. To what extend are you agree or disagree?
It is sometimes believed that taking
care
of kids
by the whole family is better than only by parents
. While it is true that looking after children
by many members
of the family is good, I believe that letting only parents
bring up their offspring is more effective.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why allowing relatives to take care
of children
is good for them. One reason is that the kids
will have some relatives looking after them if their parents
are busy. Consequently
, the children
will grow up very well due to many help of their family members
. Another reason is each member of the family usually has a unique strength, which is formed because of their own practice. This
advantage will contribute great help to the kid. For example
, almost every extended families in Vietnam have their offspring growing up perfectly with many talents in many aspects such
as sports.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that children
are taken care
of better by only parents
than by the whole family. Firstly
, being helped by many family members
will lessen the kids
' love for their parents
since youngsters aren't looked after by their parents
much. If children
don't love their parents
, they may not obey the advice of their mom and dad in the future. Furthermore
, usually taking care
of offspring will increase the knowledge of adults about their kids
, which is formed while parents
look after them. For instance
, many parents
in my country easily allow their children
to do their own choice instead
of prohibiting them as they believe and understand kids
' personalities.
In conclusion, although
being looked after by many family members
is advantageous for the children
in some aspects, I believe that it is better to let parents
grow up their children
on their own. It is recommended that adults should care
more about their offspring.Submitted by tienduongftu on
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