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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SPACE EXPLORATION IS A WASTE OF RESOURCES, WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT IT IS ESSENTIAL FOR MANKIND TO CONTINUE TO EXPLORE THE UNIVERSE IN WHICH WE LIVE. DISCUSS BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR VALUABLE OPINION.

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It is an undeniable fact that different
space
 researchers love to explore things, which is related to astrology.
Also
, it is good to research various
space
-related stuff
such
 as resources and atmosphere,but in
this
space
 exploration, scientists have been using large sums of
money
 to evaluate their tasks, while from
this
 huge amount of
money
 people fulfil their basic needs, which improves working life as well as good for mankind.
To begin
 with,
space
 programs are important for gain information about the universe.
Also
, from the use of
this
 program, individuals and children are curious to learn new things about planets
such
 as different environments,locations, speed and light-related programs and so on.
In addition
, it will be beneficial for children as well as youngsters' personal growth, because
this
 kind of research takes a huge time to succeed,
as a result
, adolescents and adults improve their knowledge about
space
 and it will help them to get a higher success rate compared to any other field.
On the other hand
, the ocean amount of
money
 taken by the government to complete tasks related to
space
, while these long length digits of
money
 can be used to develop certain things, which make a safe and secure life for inhabitants.
Moreover
,
this
space
 exploration takes a long time to achieve success,
as a result
, the government takes a loan from different nations and
this
 is a heavy burden on the nation, if the government does not pay the bills on time
then
 it will create a negative effect on the particular nation. In a nutshell, I personally believe that the merits of
this
 exploration contain a lot of negative sides, which is not good for the country's growth.
Therefore
, I think that the fund can be used in mankind
instead
 of
this
 research.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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