International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. It has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the problems of international tourism outweigh its advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Cheap air travel, technological advancements, and globalization have opened doors for international

tourism

giving rise to both unprecedented advantages

as well as

disadvantages.

This

essay will discuss the benefits and negative consequences brought by the popularity of international

tourism

and argue that the advantages it offers well exceed the demerits it has. One major disadvantage of international

tourism

is the damage caused to the environment

due to

it. Air travel is a major contributor to carbon emissions and global warming, making it a big concern for many environmentalists.

Moreover

, the local

custom

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customs

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and way of life are influenced heavily by the

custom

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customs

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and traditions brought by international tourists, risking the traditional way of life and century-old customs.

As a result

, global cities look almost the same, and it is hard to tell the difference between a local and an alien culture in many cities around the world.

On the contrary

, global

tourism

has many positive outcomes. It creates huge job opportunities and economic movement, and many

countries

, including the Maldives, the Bahamas, Thailand, Indonesia, Anguilla, Spain, Aruba and Macau depend on

this

industry. Global

tourism

is the main economic driving force in

such

countries

, and without the rise of international

tourism

, their economy would have struggled.

Moreover

people

can go to a country where medical treatment is better than in their own country.

For instance

, a large number of

people

visit developed

countries

each year for better treatment, and

this

is a positive development that ensures quality healthcare for many

people

Finally

people

travel to other

countries

to enjoy their holidays, and

this

is a great opportunity for learning about diverse cultural aspects. With the increasing international

tourism

people

have a better understanding of foreign cultures, and it helps reduce the gap between nations. In conclusion, international

tourism

has some environmental and cultural issues.

However

, the opportunity and potential it has already created far outweigh its disadvantages. I believe that in

this

era of globalisation, international

tourism

will expand rapidly to bring benefits to all nations.

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Ensure that your essay has a clear and logical structure throughout, with clear topic sentences that guide the reader to understand the progression of your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion

Include an introduction and conclusion that reflect the content of the essay, providing a brief overview and summarizing your stance without introducing new ideas at the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion

Support your main points with more specific examples and data where possible to add credibility and depth to your arguments.

Task Achievement

Fully address the prompt by ensuring that your response offers a balanced view of both the problems and advantages of international tourism, focusing equally on both sides.

Task Achievement

Clarify your ideas by elaborating on them with more comprehensive explanations, ensuring your essay convincingly conveys your stance with a clear line of thought from beginning to end.

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Include more varied and detailed examples from your own knowledge or experience to effectively illustrate the points you make and to address the task more completely.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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for example
for instance
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to give a clear example
such as
namely
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

336 words

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