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The media should include more stories which report good news. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#media #stories #report #news
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There is a debate going on
whether
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about whether
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 the
media
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 should include more
stories
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 which report good news. Nowadays there are a lot of different
media
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 sources and a lot of them write articles about different
things
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 and topics. I partially agree with
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 statement, because there are pros and cons on each side of it. On one hand, when the
media
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 includes good
stories
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 it can be good for readers to get out of their routine days and just relax with an article about a great
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 or some other nice and peaceful
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.
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 when a person reads a positive story I believe, it can really make a difference
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in
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 a person's
behavior
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behaviour
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 and he could get relaxed after reading that kind of story.
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, when
people
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 read about positive movements or positive acts they might get motivated to
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 do something good for the community.
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, writing about accidents might get an even bigger audience. Many
media
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 sources like to write about
things
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 that are rare and do not happen
oftenly
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often
 and one of those
things
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 is burglaries, accidents,
robberies
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and robberies
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 because
people
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 find it interesting to read about stuff that occurs rarely. It lets them fully understand what happened and some
stories
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 are even better than movies, so
people
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 find it amusing that those kinds of
things
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 happen in real life. All
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 considered, I believe that if there would be more good news in the
media
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,
people
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 would not bother to read them, because articles regarding accidents and robberies would be much more entertaining.
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