In many parts of world there is continuos coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss the view and give your own opinion.

Elderly
people
are not respected enough in some nations nowadays, which can cause certain problems. In
this
essay the possible reason for
lack
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of
respect
towards the preceding generation is discussed,
some
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and some
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follow-up problems are indicated. Speaking about the probable background that has led to the situation, where a younger generation does not look up to their grandparents, it is necessary to mention
growing
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oversimplification of the mindset. Having taken up the educational function some easy pleasures, clip thinking,
social
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and social
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media networking websites have turned the core social values upside down, including family hierarchy. Take
for instance
contemporary Russia, a country with strong traditions, where a grandfather used to be the head of the family and a role model. Unfortunately, today’s Russian teenagers tend to occasionally allow themselves arrogant and rude
behavior
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behaviour
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towards their grandparents and in public places. In
such
a way,
change
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a change
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of values may be the reason why the young do not
respect
the old at times. Considering the fact that structure has always been one of the most essential
principals
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principles
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in society, it can be concluded that
nNeglecting
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neglecting
ideas, interests and
experience
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experiences
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of older generations might!!! lead to dramatic consequences.
Firstly
, once
respect
to
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for
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our grandparents is lost, we are likely to repeat mistakes already made years ago.
Secondly
, old
people
are very precious because without them significant traditions and customs might
be easily vanished
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??
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forgotten.
Finally
, only as long as we count(??учитываем/считаемся) others despite/
repardless
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regardless
/not depending on??? their age, social status, or race or gender, only
then
we can be called ‘human beings’. These three problems might be encountered if we continue losing
respect
towards older
people
. To conclude, all of us must be respectful enough to older
people
both to keep our society functioning properly and to remain
humans
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. As Newton said once, ‘we cannot see far enough without standing on the shoulders of our ancestors’.
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