In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Nowadays, many
countries
have been trying to develop advanced items to solve the lack of
food
in the
world
by the way why many people around the
world
still go hungry. In my opinion, I think “Capitalism”. Under “the
world
order” by the USA in 1970 (the cold war) divide the
countries
around the
world
into
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3 groups, 1) the
first
world
was like the USA, UK, and Japan like that, 2) the
second
world
was like the Soviet Union and 3) the
third
word was a developing country. I didn’t think capitalism is bad. I think it made many problems
such
as the lack of
food
in poor
countries
. According to economics, developed
countries
have an absolute right to take advantage of the resource in the developing
countries
with the lowest wage, the hardest work and the most dangerous place
working
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Hence
, the people who live in developing
countries
has no opportunities to mobilisation their status. The lowest wage they get and vice versa the high price of their item product
for example
1 dollar US per day for 1 worker in developed
countries
, but 100 dollars US per the item product to be sealed, the cap is approximately 99 dollars US goes to the owner who lives in the developed
countries
. The solve
this
problem, I think the government in each country should guarantee their citizen
have
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basic rights,
food
, clean water and education,
for example
. The highest price of
food
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the
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poor people to access
food
, so the government need to bare the barrier price of
food
won’t be high.
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  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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