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Some children spend hours everyday on their smart devices. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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The advent of technology has brought many disadvantages as well as advantages due to which several
children
 are devoting many hours daily to their mobile phones. I believe it has more downside than upside. I shall be discussing the cause and the impacts in the following paragraphs with pertinent examples.
To begin
 with, in the modern epoch everyone is in the rat race to earn more money and,
children
 are being neglected by their parents because of
this
 they indulge in using smart
devices
.
Moreover
, parents
also
 promote their
children
 to use smartphones as it will give them more
time
 to focus on their work. Using smart
devices
 for a long
time
 has many disadvantages for
children
 since it has been scientifically proven that spending too much
time
 on smart
devices
 can lead to many ailments
such
 as shortsightedness and obesity.
furthermore
, indulging too much in smart
devices
 can
also
 cause hindrances in the cognitive development of the child. There is a variety of mature content available on the internet
however
children
 do get access to
this
 type of content at a
such
 young age which
children
 should not watch
however
 due to the negligence of the parents.
Children
 nowadays are becoming
self-centered
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 due to spending too much
time
 on these
devices
 whereas earlier
children
 used to play outside of their house and make new friends. Depression among
children
 is
also
 rising due to
this
 reason. to sum up, devoting enormous periods to these
devices
 brings no good. It has more demerits than merits for the child and
parent
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parents
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 should keep a check on their child.
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