In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes.
In some parts of the world, in the
last
decade
private teaching for workouts is a job Add a comma
decade,
who
has developed a lot. Correct pronoun usage
that
People
use them daily. In this
essay, I will demonstrate the positive and the negative of this
phenomenon.
Firstly
, this
is a really good development due to
the lot of beginners in every gym
. People
who begin at the gym
but do not know anything about exercise or any machines will be happy to get help. For example
, a man who has a few kilos in excess and decides to start a membership at the gym
will take a personal fitness trainer to help him to be confident and show him the right movements.
However
, It can be more fun and cheaper to do exercise classes. The way to learn with few people
can motivate you to not miss any lessons and make new friends. In addition
, most of the time the classes are cheaper compared the
private lessons. Change preposition
to the
For instance
, a workout with a friend will push you to the limit because you want to show the best of yourself.
In conclusion, having a private trainer is really important to start a new sport, but if you want to improve on it, you need to make friends with the same interest and the sport will not be painful anymore but you will have a lot of fun. I think people
need personal training need to be considered because you can hurt yourself by doing bad movements at the gym
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task response
Ensure the essay directly addresses the prompt. Your introduction should clearly state whether you believe the shift towards hiring personal trainers over group activities is positive or negative. This statement sets the direction for your discussion.
task response
Expand your essay by incorporating a more detailed analysis of the reasons behind the trend of hiring personal fitness trainers. Discussing the broader social or health implications can add depth to your argument.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider variety of sentence structures and transitions to enhance the flow and readability. Try to avoid repetitive sentence beginnings and aim for more sophisticated linking words beyond 'however' and 'in addition'.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs clearly with one main idea per paragraph, supported by detailed examples or explanations. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that outlines what the paragraph will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of your essay and clearly states your final stance on the issue. Tie back to your introduction to create a cohesive argument.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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