Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, government should focus on more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
cutting-edge era public face a lot of health risks and diseases behind this
situation some people
say that government should focus more on reducing environmental problems
and household problems
. In my point of view , there are other factors that also
affect people
's health. In forthcoming paragraphs, I will precise more and then
give appropriate
conclusion to Add an article
an appropriate
this
essay.
To begin
with, human
face more Fix the agreement mistake
humans
problems
than past
Change preposition
in past
era
due to bad environmental conditions that lead Fix the agreement mistake
eras
various
health disasters Change preposition
to various
such
as flu, cough, heart problem, stress
among all ages Correct word choice
and stress
people
even small children as well suffer from the disease. Governments have the responsibility to take care of their citizen and provide them healthy
environment. Apart from Add an article
a healthy
this
authority, it should make rules and low for those who harm environment
and pollute it. What is more? note only the environment but Add an article
the environment
also
housing is one of the other concerning issue people
have no clean water in their homes more ever they have not much space for leaving that also
in engenders.
To be more precise, there are some other factors as well; stress levels in floks
Correct your spelling
folks
flocks
also
increase due to their unorganised nature and lack of sleep during the night and more frequent usage of phone and computer systems. Apparently, all citizens faced cutthroat competition from their counterparts as a result
their struggles and difficulties are
increased day by day. Unnecessary verb
apply
Additionally
, being unemployed they face difficulties for their survival and unemployment also
leads poverty
among young Change preposition
to poverty
people
then
they feel inferior. Adding more information, people
's lifestyles are known more flexible so they have
not much time for exercise Add a missing verb
do have
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
also
lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
illnesses
Change preposition
to illnesses
such
as obesity.
To sum up, not only environmental and housing problems
in people
's lives but there are other reasons as well governments should focus on all these factors properly.Submitted by mahlyan.vs2111999 on
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