Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, government should focus on more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
cutting-edge era public face a lot of health risks and diseases behind Linking Words
this
situation some Linking Words
people
say that government should focus more on reducing environmental Use synonyms
problems
and household Use synonyms
problems
. In my point of view , there are other factors that Use synonyms
also
affect Linking Words
people
's health. In forthcoming paragraphs, I will precise more and Use synonyms
then
give Linking Words
appropriate
conclusion to Add an article
an appropriate
this
essay.
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To begin
with, Linking Words
human
face more Fix the agreement mistake
humans
problems
than Use synonyms
past
Change preposition
in past
era
due to bad environmental conditions that lead Fix the agreement mistake
eras
various
health disasters Change preposition
to various
such
as flu, cough, heart problem, Linking Words
stress
among all ages Correct word choice
and stress
people
even small children as well suffer from the disease. Governments have the responsibility to take care of their citizen and provide them Use synonyms
healthy
environment. Apart from Add an article
a healthy
this
authority, it should make rules and low for those who harm Linking Words
environment
and pollute it. What is more? note only the environment but Add an article
the environment
also
housing is one of the other concerning issue Linking Words
people
have no clean water in their homes more ever they have not much space for leaving that Use synonyms
also
in engenders.
To be more precise, there are some other factors as well; stress levels in Linking Words
floks
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folks
flocks
also
increase due to their unorganised nature and lack of sleep during the night and more frequent usage of phone and computer systems. Apparently, all citizens faced cutthroat competition from their counterparts Linking Words
as a result
their struggles and difficulties Linking Words
are
increased day by day. Unnecessary verb
apply
Additionally
, being unemployed they face difficulties for their survival and unemployment Linking Words
also
leads Linking Words
poverty
among young Change preposition
to poverty
people
Use synonyms
then
they feel inferior. Adding more information, Linking Words
people
's lifestyles are known more flexible so they Use synonyms
have
not much time for exercise Add a missing verb
do have
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
also
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lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
illnesses
Change preposition
to illnesses
such
as obesity.
To sum up, not only environmental and housing Linking Words
problems
in Use synonyms
people
's lives but there are other reasons as well governments should focus on all these factors properly.Use synonyms
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