Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, government should focus on more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
cutting-edge era public face a lot of health risks and diseases behind
this
situation some
people
say that government should focus more on reducing environmental
problems
and household
problems
. In my point of view , there are other factors that
also
affect
people
's health. In forthcoming paragraphs, I will precise more and
then
give
appropriate
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conclusion to
this
essay.
To begin
with,
human
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humans
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face more
problems
than
past
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era
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eras
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due to bad environmental conditions that lead
various
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health disasters
such
as flu, cough, heart problem,
stress
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and stress
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among all ages
people
even small children as well suffer from the disease. Governments have the responsibility to take care of their citizen and provide them
healthy
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environment. Apart from
this
authority, it should make rules and low for those who harm
environment
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the environment
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and pollute it. What is more? note only the environment but
also
housing is one of the other concerning issue
people
have no clean water in their homes more ever they have not much space for leaving that
also
in engenders. To be more precise, there are some other factors as well; stress levels in
floks
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folks
flocks
also
increase due to their unorganised nature and lack of sleep during the night and more frequent usage of phone and computer systems. Apparently, all citizens faced cutthroat competition from their counterparts
as a result
their struggles and difficulties
are
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increased day by day.
Additionally
, being unemployed they face difficulties for their survival and unemployment
also
leads
poverty
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among young
people
then
they feel inferior. Adding more information,
people
's lifestyles are known more flexible so they
have
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not much time for exercise
that
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also
lead
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leads
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illnesses
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to illnesses
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such
as obesity. To sum up, not only environmental and housing
problems
in
people
's lives but there are other reasons as well governments should focus on all these factors properly.
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