Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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people
use distance learning
program
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to study at home but some
people
think that it cannot bring the benefit as much
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college or
universities
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.To what extent do you agree and disagree? It is
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believe
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that most
of
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people
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the people
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prefer studying at home rather than going to college or
universities
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university
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.I consider that face-to-face conversation is vital. To explain, it is right that
paper based
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study
in
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an old method.In
this
regard
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modern
people
are keen to replace it with social network resources.
Moreover
, online study is convenient, as they will get knowledge.
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have duties at their home so, they
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unable to attend college or university but they can conduct their online class according to their schedules.
On the other hand
, it is clear that online education cannot replace the old method of teaching.As these changes can
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influence
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their interpersonal abilities,
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communication and cooperation with
the
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persons of the same age.In
this
scene
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face-to-face
communicationis
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communication is
communications
crucial for the students.Due to
which
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they increase more knowledge and will become a good leader and speaker in the
next
.
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,
people
that cannot communicate with each other,
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can damage
to
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their career opportunities. In conclusion,
although
many
people
reckon online learning is
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advantageous
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students.In regards, I believe in whom students should be taught at higher education and other academic institutions, as nowadays distance educational system cannot replace the ragged methods.
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