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Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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In the modern era, the
crime
 rate is increasing tremendously all over the world. It is higher among the people who are released from
prison
. The following essay will discuss reasons
such
 as the
lack
 of jobs and acceptance by society and the introduction of
skill
 training and rehabilitation are possible solutions to decrease the
crime
rates
. Some of the reasons behind the surge in
crime
rates
 are the
lack
 of jobs after their release from
Prison
. When
criminals
 are released after the completion of their sentence, they struggle to find a
job
 due to a
lack
 of skills needed for any skilled
job
then
 they start stealing or do crimes to fulfil their basic needs.
Moreover
, their criminal status
also
 acts as a barrier to finding a suitable
job
. No one will offer them a
job
 due to which they start working with other
criminals
 and are at higher risk of getting caught again. The
crime
rates
 can be reduced by introducing certain programs during
prison
 time.
Firstly
, by the introduction of
skill
 training, the government can train the prisoners in skills
such
 as painting, mechanics, and plumbing which will assist them in long term to gain a
skill
 required to find a
job
 in the community.
Secondly
, the government should introduce a rehabilitation program for
criminals
 where they were taught some techniques to control their temptation to commit any crimes or look for an easy way out.
Furthermore
, the introduction of these programs provides a chance to
criminals
 to amend their ways. To conclude, the
crime
rates
 among released prisoners are increasing due to unemployment and
lack
 of social acceptance by the community which can be eradicated through
skill
 training and rehabilitation during their
prison
 time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegrate
  • Social stigma
  • Recidivism
  • Criminal records
  • Ex-offender
  • Associations
  • Comprehensive
  • Workforce
  • Mentoring
  • Incentivize
  • Stigmatize
  • Subsidies
  • Legitimate
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