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Some people argue that internet-based lectures is better type of lectures. The other tend to believe that university-based lecture is still needed. Explain both side of the view and give your opinion.

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some people that online lectures are the best type of learning,
however
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 others think that traditional university lessons are better.Both ways of
education
 have their own advantages and disadvantages. Online
education
 appeared relatively recently and already became one of the best ways to study due to its convenience and accessibility for everyone.
To begin
 internet-based lectures you need only a few things
such
 as electronic devices and the internet.,
Also
 you would be able comfortable time and even study everywhere where you want for free.
However
, there are several drawbacks of Internet-based lessons
such
 as I will not
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 a tutor so it would be harder to motivate myself,
also
 laziness is a crucial problem of online
education
.
On the other hand
, universities are one of the best places where you earn knowledge, checked by time and graduation from university guarantee you that you will become a highly skilled specialist while online-based schools could not give you
such
 grant.going to the lectures at the same time every day would teach
self discipline
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 to you. So to conclude both ways of
education
 are good ,their disadvantage does not overweight the advantages that they provide.
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