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It is more important to learn about local history than foreign history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era , it is always handy to learn about the
history
 of native as well as foreign land because both
has
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 an important role to play in the learning process.
Therefore
, I partially agree with the above notion that one should only read about local
history
.
To begin
 with, studying historical events of native land helps an individual to gather knowledge about the events that had happened in the past, which would help one to attach to his roots and draw inspiration from the life events of great leaders , who played an important role in making the country great.
For example
, people usually travel to ancient monuments but they will only understand their importance if they know little about the
history
 of the place.
Hence
, learning local
history
 should always be valued.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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