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You have a full time job and also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tuttor. In your letter Describe the situation Explain why you cannot continue at this time Say what action you would like to take

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you regarding the situation of my poor parents, who are still struggling to eat bread and butter every day
due to
 low income. In
this
 case, it is not easy for me to continue
this
course
, because it will not only take my time, but I will
also
 have to pay fees of $300 every month. Despite that, I can do part-time work to
fulfill
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 my everyday needs. So, in
this
 situation, I will need to quit the
course
 for some months, but I will pursue
this
course
 after one year of experience in the same field. Kindly help me to refund the
course
 fees from the accounts department. I hope you will understand my problem. Yours Faithfully XYZ
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task achievement
Expand on your explanation regarding why you cannot continue the course by incorporating more specifics about your job responsibilities and time constraints.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a single main idea to improve coherence and readability. For instance, separate financial issues from scheduling conflicts.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens with a clear and relevant introduction, addressing the recipient appropriately and setting the context.
task achievement
The writing tone is formal and respectful, suitable for a letter to the course tutor.
coherence cohesion
Your letter concludes politely and appropriately, reinforcing the main points and making a clear request.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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