We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology how do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

Many people these days rely more and more
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their computers and phones for many things.
such
as
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entertainment
, work and study. will
this
dependency on
technology
change in the future? and is
this
even a good thing for
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humanity
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I will try to answer both of these questions and
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why I think
technology
is vital for us to
advnace
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advance
and improve our
lifes
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lives
life
. As
technology
improves, I believe we will rely on it more than we ever did before. It will become easier and faster to
use
with many features and
apilities
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abilities
capabilities
.
For example
, a new company called Nurallink is developing a new
technology
to attach a chip to a human brain and using
this
chip you can
controll
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control
your phone or computer without
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it.
In addition
. it can send data directly to your brain like images and videos even if
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blind. So
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like having a phone directly connected to your head and you can send,
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receive
and search for information by just thinking about it.
This
is just one example of
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new
technologies
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technology
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and there are many others that I believe will change how we live in the future in a good way. While it is true that relying on
technology
too much can have
man
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drawbacks, I believe
technology
is and will be an important part of
everyone
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lives and we will not be able to avoid it. You will have to
use
technology
even for long periods of time if you want to keep up with
everyone
else.
For example
, when phones
first
came out some people did not like them and
they
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rarely
use
them, so they lost touch with what is going on in the world or they were not able to communicate with their families and friends
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because
everyone
and everything is online. All the news and
socail
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social
media can be accessed using a phone. so these same people who decided not to
use
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new
technology
were left out. I believe the same thing will happen in the future with new
technologies
. So even with the negative things that come with
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new
technologies
, you will likely be forced to
use
them to be a part of society. In summary, I think that
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technology
will improve very fast and it will be even
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used than now so we will have to rely on it
on
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almost everything and
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hopefully
improve our
lifes
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lives
life
for the better, and even if don't like these new
technologies
, if there are
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useful
and
everyone
uses them we will have to
adapte
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adapt
them to keep up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Machine Learning
  • Automated
  • Internet of Things (IoT)
  • Telecommuting
  • Digital Technology
  • Virtual Workplaces
  • Computer-assisted
  • Healthcare Industry
  • Reliance
  • Privacy
  • Human Interaction
  • Job Displacement
  • Automation
  • Digital Divide
  • Cybersecurity
  • Internet Safety
  • Digital Crime
  • Ethical Considerations
  • Environmental Impacts
  • E-waste
  • Carbon Footprint
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