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Some say that at all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, a lot of time is spent learning the facts and not enough time is devoted to practical skills. Do you agree or not?

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Some say that at all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, a lot of time is spent
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learning the facts and not enough time is devoted to practical skills, In my essay, I'll discuss
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 opinion and express my views. As a matter of fact, and from
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an experiment
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experiment
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 in
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 regime, there is a lot of time spent
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studying theories, reading or hearing about all things without having any chance or maybe very limited times to see it, touch it, or try to practice science by our own hands. In my country the obvious reason for
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 defect is the lack of
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funds provided to the
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education
, regardless of the situations
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 to the reduced budget provided
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 mission, the truth is, we and my pears didn'
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had
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 any luck
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 the geological
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museum
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 or to do chemical tests by our own hands, we
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 didn'
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had
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 any field trips to any working factory, the system
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 didn'
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 provide any summer workshops to give us the operational talents. During my study
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 the
univeristy
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university
, circumstances changed a little bit for the better,
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, we had the opportunity to practice what we read and told lectured on in the study rooms, there are laboratories to
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 chemical formulas, another laboratory to
disect
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dissect
 animals and insects specimens, visited plants and had formal training, well, but from my point of view it wasn'
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 enough,
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, little better than nothing.
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, and from my perspective,
edcuational
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educational
 institutions, shall
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exert
 more resources and shall overhaul the system to be oriented to implement science
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 of reading
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itabout
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