Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of violence in films on television and at the cinema.Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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beleive
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believe
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goverment
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government
should take and control the action
films
which are
showing
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TVand
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TV and
Cinema
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others think it is not necessary to do that. Young and
adults
without
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differences
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both are
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to watch violent
films
.They are
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waiting
till new
films
come to the
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theatres
.Not only that, search
from
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the internet and updated
of
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the
films
and
teledramaes
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teledramas
which are ready to show.
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,
another
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people do not enjoy
the
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films
or dramas which are included fights . There are more rules and regulations
are
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introduced by the
authorites
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authorities
to control the misbehavioral
ativities
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activities
which have happened due to the film industry.Already most
of
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the
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countries including Sri Lanka have
aproved
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approved
procedure
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procedures
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for reviewing
films
.Before showing the cinema on the
filmhall
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film all
film hall
the board should review and give their approval.In Sri lanks not
allow
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allowed
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to watch some
films
to
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for
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the
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those
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who are under eighteen.
However
, some parents allow their children to watch any kind of
films
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film
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under their
suppervision
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supervision
.
Furthermore
,
adults
are
rescrited
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prescribed
restricted
to
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children do not see
the
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films
which are not suitable for them. My
openion
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opinion
on
that is
slightly different Because as an adult they should be able to enjoy their life without harming
to
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the
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socity
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society
city
.
Therefore
it is not necessary to apply any rules to restrict the film industry.
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the other hand, not like
kids
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,kids
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they know their
resposibilities
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responsibilities
as well.
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However
, authorities should have
an
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resposibility
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responsibility
to look
afterthe
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after the
younger generation in the country. Not only the authorities parents,
teachers as well as
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but teachers as well as adults also
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adults
take a look at their kids. My idea on
that is
no need to apply rules to restrict
the
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violence
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violent
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films
. But
adults
should pay
their
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attention
on
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to
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the
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children and
do
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not allow
to
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them to
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misuse the internet, do not give money without
reason
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this
kind of
stratagies
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strategies
can
be apply
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to
minimice
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minimise
minimize
the
challengers
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challenges
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that occured
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occured
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occurred
due to the
viollence
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violence
violent
films
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regulation
  • vulnerable groups
  • age restrictions
  • censorship
  • real-life aggression
  • healthier society
  • creative freedom
  • free speech
  • artistic vision
  • cultural narratives
  • personal responsibility
  • viewing choices
  • balanced approach
  • rating systems
  • parental guidance
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