In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight: Reasons and solutions.

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children
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are overweight in various
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.
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essay will discuss why
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is the case and suggest some practical
solution
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. One of the main causes of the problem is that there are a lot of fast
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restaurants
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these days, which include MC Donald, KFC, Subway,
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and Burger
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King. These
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expand over many
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as they are chain
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.
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, many people could easily buy it.
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kind of
food
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is cheap and easy to grab for those
children
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who have less money than adults,
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, those
foods
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contain less nutrition than fats.
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, the more
children
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eat fast
foods
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, the more they gain weight. In order to address the problem, there are a number of effective solutions.
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of all, parents should control their child's eating habits.
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they can pack a healthy lunch box for their child every day in order to make them fit and healthy. The
next
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way out is for the government to make people eat fast
foods
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less than before.
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, The government could increase the tax
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fast
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fast-food
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food
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restaurants
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. As the price gets higher,
children
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may have less of a chance to eat those
foods
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. In conclusion,
this
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essay examines the reason why
children
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gain overweight in many
countries
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: there are a lot of fast
food
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restaurants
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in many
countries
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. To tackle the problem, I strongly advise parents to pack
healthy
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a healthy
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lunch
box
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boxes
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and the government to make people eat less fast
food
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in order to make them healthier.
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