You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like bout the cafeteria say what is wrong suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am

student

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Colombo University. I am writing

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letter to inform

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improvement of the deficiencies in the cafeteria.

However

, I regularly have my lunch at the cafeteria, because over there the food was so delicious and have friendly staff

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who Provide excellent customer service.

Furthermore

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is reasonable and

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of food available. I am extremely satisfied

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overall

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, but there are

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facilities

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to be updated.

Firstly

, we have to wait there

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time to purchase our meals, because has only one counter.

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lunch

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time

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the cafeteria was

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overcrowded and impossible to find a place to sit down.

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there are many fans broken and inside too hot.

Therefore

, I would like to Suggest

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another two counters to

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food,

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we can purchase our meals quickly.

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I think need

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few tables

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the terrace,

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more places to sit down.

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I think

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option

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fan

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air conditioners. Yours faithfully, Sam

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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like bout the cafeteria say what is wrong suggest how it could be improved

Supermarkets shoul only sell food produced within their own country. What are your opinions about it.

In some cultures, children are often toldthat they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of given children this message?

Topic 2: Some peole think the government should focus on improving the economy of the country. Other people think that government should focus on social services such as health and education programs. Which statement do you agree with? Explain and provide examples to support your opinion.

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?