Nowadays pollution and wastage levels are increasing rapidly. How does this affect ordinary people? What steps can be taken to overcome this problem.

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and garbage amounts are ramping up instantly, over recent days. It is true that contamination
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a huge impact on people’s
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there are various reason and a variety of measures to be taken to tackle
this
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given in my essay. It is obvious that the
pollution
produced by old cars and factories can cause serious problems in
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society in which both
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and humans of
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can be inevitably affected by its drawbacks.
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most significant cause of
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in our country is air
pollution
which still has been unsolved. In my view, the
government
ought to take advantage of specialists who studied in the field of environment conservation, in order to handle and manage the pollutants source as well as the wastes of the factories. Some experts believe that if environmental laws were efficiently legislated, a crisis like
pollution
would not occur.
In particular
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effectively stopped lots of contaminant sources from relieving into
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in developed countries.
Hence
, our
government
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problem
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in our major cities like Tehran, Mashhad and Isfahan.
For instance
, scheduling the
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which run on fossil fuels can significantly reduce dangerous gases that are currently breathed by people who live in Tehran. In conclusion,
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is mostly responsible to control
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pollution
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by inspiring measures
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been taken in developed countries and implementing related specialists. I hope they would plan to solve
this
problem in the upcoming future.
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