Some people say that museum should be free where as others opine that some entry fee should be there. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Museums
are one of the places where people
who are curious about their history
can go. While it is said by some people
that museum
should be out of cost, others believe to visit them visitors have to pay. In Fix the agreement mistake
museums
this
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I will evaluate both viewpoints. Add a comma
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However
, i
agree with Change the capitalization
I
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the later
later
statement.
Places Correct your spelling
latter
where
exhibit ancient tools including Correct word choice
that
potery
and paintings are Correct your spelling
pottery
poetry
extremly
useful for all Correct your spelling
extremely
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
specially
for Replace the word
especially
history
seekers. some people
say these places should be free for everyone, because there are some people
who are interested in history
but they do not have enough money
to visit them regularly, so, by eliminating ticket
they are able to go to ancient Fix the agreement mistake
tickets
buldings
and Correct your spelling
buildings
museum
as much as they want. Fix the agreement mistake
museums
In addition
, despite this
fact that their knowledge will increase, it is beneficial for Correct determiner usage
the
whole
nation. Because they can use their information to preserve from country's culture.
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the whole
On the contrary
, a number of people
and I believe tickets should be remained
on Change to the active voice
remain
have remained
theses
sites even cheap tickets. Correct your spelling
these
To begin
with, it is essential to remember maintaining of
all the objects provided in Change preposition
apply
musuems
Correct your spelling
museums
require
a lot of Correct subject-verb agreement
requires
money
. Moreover
, staff and guardians need payment, which generally are
paid by earned Change the verb form
is
money
from selling tickets. Secondly
, if museums
were always free, individuals would understimate
the value of the historical objects preserved Correct your spelling
underestimate
in
there. Change preposition
apply
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up Wrong verb form
Following
this
, maybe they will not care about them anymore as a great source of data about Change preposition
on this
history
. However
, some days the entry should do
not have any fee to encourage students and ordinary Unnecessary verb
apply
people
to visit them. For example
, in my country, almost
one week per Change preposition
for almost
a
year, all the Correct article usage
apply
museums
and historical buildings are free for visitors.
To sum up, although
lake of ticket fee for mentioned
site can benefit Add an article
the mentioned
a mentioned
peniless
but curious Correct your spelling
penniless
people
, protecting old and valuable products in museums
need money
. Furthermore
, as a result
, people
care more about something when they pay money
for it.Submitted by amin.ranjbar77 on
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