Some people say that museum should be free where as others opine that some entry fee should be there. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Museums
are one of the places where
people
who are curious about their
history
can go. While it is said by some
people
that
museum
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should be out of cost, others believe to visit them visitors have to pay. In
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I will evaluate both viewpoints.
However
,
i
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agree with
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later
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statement. Places
where
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exhibit ancient tools including
potery
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pottery
poetry
and paintings are
extremly
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extremely
useful for all
the
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people
specially
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for
history
seekers. some
people
say these places should be free for everyone, because there are some
people
who are interested in
history
but they do not have enough
money
to visit them regularly, so, by eliminating
ticket
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they are able to go to ancient
buldings
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buildings
and
museum
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museums
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as much as they want.
In addition
, despite
this
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fact that their knowledge will increase, it is beneficial for
whole
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nation. Because they can use their information to preserve from country's culture.
On the contrary
, a number of
people
and I believe tickets should
be remained
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remain
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on
theses
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these
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sites even cheap tickets.
To begin
with, it is essential to remember maintaining
of
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all the objects provided in
musuems
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museums
require
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requires
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a lot of
money
.
Moreover
, staff and guardians need payment, which generally
are
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paid by earned
money
from selling tickets.
Secondly
, if
museums
were always free, individuals would
understimate
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underestimate
the value of the historical objects preserved
in
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there.
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up
this
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, maybe they will not care about them anymore as a great source of data about
history
.
However
, some days the entry should
do
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not have any fee to encourage students and ordinary
people
to visit them.
For example
, in my country,
almost
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one week per
a
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year, all the
museums
and historical buildings are free for visitors. To sum up,
although
lake of ticket fee for
mentioned
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site can benefit
peniless
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penniless
but curious
people
, protecting old and valuable products in
museums
need
money
.
Furthermore
,
as a result
,
people
care more about something when they pay
money
for it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public engagement
  • financial sustainability
  • socioeconomic backgrounds
  • educational experiences
  • exhibits
  • new acquisitions
  • economic accessibility
  • culture and history
  • equality
  • perceived value
  • tourism
  • downstream economic benefits
  • operational costs
  • staffing
  • security
  • maintenance
  • inclusivity
  • cultural opportunities
  • special exhibits
  • resources
  • crowds
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