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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Introduction
In new modern
life
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internet
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the internet
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esclated
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escalated
 tremendously because
its
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play
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plays
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 an important role in
every one
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life
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.most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 agree with that for
defferant
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different
reson
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reason
however
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 less can argued plentufly of the website information can be
athreat
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a threat
 of their
life
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, we will
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highlight
 which view is right and the
reson
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reason
 of that in the passage.
Body paragraph 1
At
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beginig
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beginning
, we will list some of
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the benifits
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benifits
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benefits
using
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of using
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 the
internet
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 in our live
satrting
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starting
setting
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moving
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 to work and which transportation I will take so
its
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it's
it is
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 easy to find anything on the web
badgs
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badges
bags
 starting from
shooping
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shopping
,reading,
studing
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studying
 and searching.
Body paragraph 2
Furthermore
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, it's highly
recomneded
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recommended
 for online learning nowadays in case of crises and natural
desasters
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disasters
such
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 as
virus
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the virus
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pandemic
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pandemics
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 and floods.
Body paragraph 3
Besdie
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Beside
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 that we can learn
form
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from
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 other
culture
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cultures
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 and the
lifestye
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lifestyle
 for all around the world without being
their
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there
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,
its
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it
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 a
plently
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plenty
advandages
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advantages
 for using
internet
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 information to guide us for the right things but
on the contrary
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 there will be some
obistacles
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obstacles
for
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to
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 using
these
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this
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data
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such
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 as hacking for your
perssonal
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personal
data
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 and gathering personal
informations
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information
pieces of information
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.
Moreover
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, there will
sexual
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sexually
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 abuse through commercial advertising which is not suitable for all and should be blocked.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I
recomned
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recommend
 to uses
the
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apply
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internet
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data
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 in our modern
life
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carfully
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carefully
 without
disclose
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disclosure
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 of personal
data
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 and
get
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getting
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tranning
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training
 for safe usage of
internet
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informations
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information
pieces of information
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 without
expose
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exposing
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ourself
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ourselves
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 or our families to danger.

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