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Although there is a lot of software available today that can translate from one language to another, it is still necessary for people to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#software #language #people
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Nowadays, with the help of the internet and smart devices, we can easily translate
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 from one
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 to another.
While
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 some
people
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 believe that it is enough for modern
people
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 to have translation
software
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, I would argue that it is still necessary for someone to learn a foreign
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.
Firstly
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, using
software
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 for translation already helps some
people
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 to interact with other mankind.
However
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, there are several problems that happen if the application
misunderstood
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 the spelling or someone's dialect.
For example
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, in French which
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 on pronunciation, one word can have several meanings. The fact that there is an opportunity for the application to
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 an error led us not to rely on the
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 must learn foreign languages in order to understand correctly.
Second,
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learning other languages has a significant effect on our brains because it exercises our minds.
Moreover
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, knowing other languages is necessary for increasing our academic level.
Likewise
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, if any student wants to pursue a higher degree
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, they must
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understand the
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that is
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 used in the country. In conclusion, in
this
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 modern world, technology already helps and eases our way of life, including helping the way we interact with
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that
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 speak a different
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 from us.
Nevertheless
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, learning is always necessary for mankind in order to survive in a country or territory that
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 a different
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. We cannot rely on the technology itself. Because
software
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 is just a tool, and our brain has much more power than it.
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