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Although there is a lot of software available today that can translate from one language to another, it is still necessary for people to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#software #language #people
Nowadays, with the help of the internet and smart devices, we can easily translate
language
 from one
language
 to another.
While
 some
people
 believe that it is enough for modern
people
 to have translation
software
, I would argue that it is still necessary for someone to learn a foreign
language
.
Firstly
, using
software
 for translation already helps some
people
 to interact with other mankind.
However
, there are several problems that happen if the application
misunderstood
Wrong verb form
misunderstands
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 the spelling or someone's dialect.
For example
, in French which
focused
Wrong verb form
focuses
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 on pronunciation, one word can have several meanings. The fact that there is an opportunity for the application to
occur
Verb problem
make
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 an error led us not to rely on the
software
.
As a result
,
people
 must learn foreign languages in order to understand correctly.
Second,
learning other languages has a significant effect on our brains because it exercises our minds.
Moreover
, knowing other languages is necessary for increasing our academic level.
Likewise
, if any student wants to pursue a higher degree
aboard
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abroad
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, they must
have to
Verb problem
apply
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understand the
language
that is
 used in the country. In conclusion, in
this
 modern world, technology already helps and eases our way of life, including helping the way we interact with
people
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
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 speak a different
language
 from us.
Nevertheless
, learning is always necessary for mankind in order to survive in a country or territory that
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Wrong verb form
uses
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 a different
language
. We cannot rely on the technology itself. Because
software
 is just a tool, and our brain has much more power than it.
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