In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In a few nations, Many individuals are dealing with health issues, as they eat lots of fast

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social awareness programs on social media, news

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can familiar with why they are getting health issues, and how they can stop their

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.5

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

overconsumption
diet-related illnesses
healthcare system
disincentive
public health
safeguard
economic burden
lower-income populations
public education campaigns
food labeling
health implications
obesity
heart disease
diabetes
nutrition education
punitive measures
inequity
subsidies
regulations
productivity

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