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Many parents think that it is good to teach children about the value of money. Why do you think it is important to teach them the value of money? In what ways can you help children learn the value of money?

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I believed that parents have the duty to teach their children about the
value
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 of
money
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 from their childhood. Because it is essential for them to know the
value
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 of cash. In the following paragraphs, I will describe some of my opinions like why it is necessary for them to know that and how parents can teach them about the
value
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 of
money
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.
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, I remembered that when I was studying in 5th standard, my mother usually give me
money
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 to buy snacks from the school canteen. After buying the snacks, if I have any extra
money
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, I will not give it back to my mom. My mother didn't bother about that. And I continue
this
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 habit until my 12th standard. But my mom scolded me like why are you wasting
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 by buying some unimportant things
.
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 After that, she taught me how cash is helpful in our life. From that day onwards, if I have some extra
money
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, I put it in the box for our
future
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 use. The parents can teach their children about the
value
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 of
money
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 by telling some stories and
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 advise them to save
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. Because
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 technology is developing more and more. So, in the
future
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, all the work should rely on
money
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 even if we want to drink water, we need
money
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 to buy it.
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, some people told like 'Without
money
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, we can live', it is not true in life. In fact, for all our daily needs, we need
money
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 to buy it. In conclusion, all individuals in the world have the responsibility to save
money
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 for our
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 ones. There are so many ways to save, For e.g. by putting
money
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 in the bank and every month by keeping some amount of
money
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 for our
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 needs.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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