Some students take one year off berween school and university .Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?
It is irrefutable that today
students
are receive
a gap Change the verb form
receive
year
during thier
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their
at
school or Change preposition
apply
unversity
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university
year
. It has become a
widespread and cause Change the article
apply
peopleʼs
arguments . I personally believe that the benefits of the take one Correct your spelling
people
year
far outwiegh
its drawbacks .These benefits are twofold.
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outweigh
outweighs
Fisrt
of Correct your spelling
First
all
it is an Add a comma
,all
indesputable
fact that Correct your spelling
indisputable
the
take a gap Correct your spelling
they
year
has revolutionized . For instance
this days
the majority of Change the determiner
this day
these days
students
take one year
off between school and unversity
.During Correct your spelling
university
thier
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their
the
year
they can improve their stress that reliave
it . Because they were fatigued and boring their Correct your spelling
relieves
study
. After this
phenomenon may be disappearance their stress. In addition
that students
can do other things during this
year
for example
they should learn new exercises such
as handicrafts or sports exercises. These are useful their
healthy .Change preposition
for their
Also
they can go abroad and earn money . Add a comma
,Also
Then
this
event increase
their Change the verb form
increases
finiancial
.
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financial
On the other
hand
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,hand
this
phenomenon has some drawbacks.Firstly
if students
take education a
gap Change preposition
for a
year
they will lose all information about their study
knowledge . This
is bring
their difficulties that Change the verb form
brings
following
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the following
year
they can not study
like other students
. Another reason is their interest are
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is
change
. Cause during Wrong verb form
changing
studentʼs
vacations they are busy Correct your spelling
students
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with other
other exercise
rather than studying Change the wording
another exercise
other exercises
this
is reason
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the reason
a reason
students
lose their interest and they do not want to study
.This
phenomenon may affect their life .
By way of conclusion
I once Add a comma
,conclusion
agian
reaffirm my position that Correct your spelling
again
receive
one Change the verb form
receives
year
off between school and university has
impact on modern life .I think Add the particle
tohas
this
negative effect Change preposition
on studentʼs
studentʼs
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students
futute
.Correct your spelling
future
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...