Some students take one year off berween school and university .Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

It is irrefutable that today
students
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a gap
year
during
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their
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school or
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university
year
. It has become
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widespread and cause
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arguments . I personally believe that the benefits of the take one
year
far
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outweigh
outweighs
its drawbacks .These benefits are twofold.
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of
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it is an
indesputable
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indisputable
fact that
the
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take a gap
year
has revolutionized .
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the majority of
students
take one
year
off between school and
unversity
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university
.During
thier
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their
the
year
they can improve their stress that
reliave
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relieves
it . Because they were fatigued and boring their
study
. After
this
phenomenon may be disappearance their stress.
In addition
that
students
can do other things during
this
year
for example
they should learn new exercises
such
as handicrafts or sports exercises. These are useful
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healthy .
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they can go abroad and earn money .
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this
event
increase
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their
finiancial
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financial
.
On the other
hand
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this
phenomenon has some drawbacks.
Firstly
if
students
take education
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gap
year
they will lose all information about their
study
knowledge .
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is bring
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their difficulties that
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the following
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year
they can not
study
like other
students
. Another reason is their interest
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change
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. Cause during
studentʼs
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students
vacations they are busy
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with other
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other exercise
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rather than studying
this
is
reason
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the reason
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students
lose their interest and they do not want to
study
.
This
phenomenon may affect their life . By way of
conclusion
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I once
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again
reaffirm my position that
receive
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one
year
off between school and university
has
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impact on modern life .I think
this
negative effect
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students
futute
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future
.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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