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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
people
’s
lives
 are very different from the past centuries. These changes
also
 manifest themselves in the
life
quality
 of humankind. Personally, I am convinced that
now
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human beings live better than earlier. The main reason why I support
this
 view is that now
people
 do not have to fight for their own survival, as it was before. The duration of human
life
 has greatly increased over the century
due to
 the development of medicine and scientific and technological progress.
This
 time of
people
's
lives
 is filled with various interesting activities,
instead
 of fighting wild animals, foraging and controlling simple diseases.
For example
, the plague known as the Black Death wiped out a third of Europe's population in the 14th century, and during the
last
 pandemic,
Covid-19
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,
people
 continued to live their
lives
 to the full, working,
communicating
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and communicating
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 with friends but in an online format. Previous generations could not have imagined
such
 a relaxed
life
 during the spread of a deadly virus, so their
lives
 were worse than those of modern
people
.
Moreover
, the
quality
 of human
lives
depend
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 on other aspects,
for example
 social, political and cultural reasons. A person’s
life
 has become better in these dimensions as well. Social norms have changed a lot, which has led to an expansion of freedom. A good illustration of
this
 is a person's ability to express themselves how they want, love who they chose by themselves and follow their own
life
 path. Previously,
people
 were
more
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forced to live by strict controversial standards,
such
 a
life
 cannot be called qualitative from a psychological point of view. These rules gave rise to many stereotypes, which modern generations are happily getting rid of now.
For instance
, women are free to be scientists,
whereas
 men can be gentle and delicate.
Life
 with new opportunities is
much
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quality
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higher quality
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, than previous versions with harsh limitations. Taking all the evidence into consideration, I believe that
people
 in the 21st century live much better than
people
 did in previous times.
Furthermore
, the
quality
 of
life
 has improved in many areas.
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