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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
people
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’s
lives
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 are very different from the past centuries. These changes
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 manifest themselves in the
life
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quality
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 of humankind. Personally, I am convinced that
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human beings live better than earlier. The main reason why I support
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 view is that now
people
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 do not have to fight for their own survival, as it was before. The duration of human
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 has greatly increased over the century
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 the development of medicine and scientific and technological progress.
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's
lives
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 is filled with various interesting activities,
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 of fighting wild animals, foraging and controlling simple diseases.
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, the plague known as the Black Death wiped out a third of Europe's population in the 14th century, and during the
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 pandemic,
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,
people
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 continued to live their
lives
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 to the full, working,
communicating
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and communicating
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 with friends but in an online format. Previous generations could not have imagined
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 a relaxed
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 during the spread of a deadly virus, so their
lives
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 were worse than those of modern
people
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.
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, the
quality
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 of human
lives
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depend
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 on other aspects,
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 social, political and cultural reasons. A person’s
life
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 has become better in these dimensions as well. Social norms have changed a lot, which has led to an expansion of freedom. A good illustration of
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 is a person's ability to express themselves how they want, love who they chose by themselves and follow their own
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 path. Previously,
people
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 were
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forced to live by strict controversial standards,
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 a
life
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 cannot be called qualitative from a psychological point of view. These rules gave rise to many stereotypes, which modern generations are happily getting rid of now.
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, women are free to be scientists,
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 men can be gentle and delicate.
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 with new opportunities is
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quality
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higher quality
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, than previous versions with harsh limitations. Taking all the evidence into consideration, I believe that
people
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 in the 21st century live much better than
people
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 did in previous times.
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, the
quality
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 of
life
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 has improved in many areas.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advances
  • Healthcare systems
  • Life expectancy
  • Information access
  • Digital tools
  • Comfort and convenience
  • Modern conveniences
  • Mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Urbanization
  • Human rights
  • Social advancement
  • Life satisfaction
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