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Band 2.5

Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a
lot
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people
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claim
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 that
movie
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 theatres are no longer relevant because of new streaming
channels
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 like YouTube or
Netflix
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. I disagree with
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idea
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 because
cinemas
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 are popular gathering
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 for most young
people
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 and they are
also
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 important for the
economy
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 of that particular region or city. Nowadays, a
lot
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 of
people
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claim
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 that
movie
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theatre
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theatres
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 are no longer relevant because of new streaming
channels
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 like
Youtue
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YouTube
 or
Netflix
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. I disagree with
this
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idea
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 because
cinemas
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 are popular gathering
locations
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 for most young
people
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 and they are
also
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 important for the
economy
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 of that particular
regions
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region
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 or
cities
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city
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. Nowadays, a
lot
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 of
people
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claim
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 that
movie
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theatre
Fix the agreement mistake
theatres
show examples
 are no longer relevant because of new streaming
channels
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 like
Youtue
Correct your spelling
YouTube
 or
Netflix
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. I disagree with
this
Linking Words
idea
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 because
cinemas
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 are popular gathering
locations
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 for most young
people
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 and they are
also
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 important for the
economy
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 of that particular
regions
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region
show examples
 or
cities
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city
show examples
. Nowadays, a
lot
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 of
people
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claim
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 that
movie
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theatre
Fix the agreement mistake
theatres
show examples
 are no longer relevant because of new streaming
channels
Use synonyms
 like
Youtue
Correct your spelling
YouTube
 or
Netflix
Use synonyms
. I disagree with
this
Linking Words
idea
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 because
cinemas
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 are popular gathering
locations
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 for most young
people
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 and they are
also
Linking Words
 important for the
economy
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 of that particular
regions
Fix the agreement mistake
region
show examples
 or
cities
Fix the agreement mistake
city
show examples
.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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