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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.  To what extent do vou agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days,
as a result
 of migration or scholarships provided by universities, many
people
 are moving to other nations while they do not know their languages.
This
 trend has caused some to be worried about social and practical problems.
To begin
 with, learning other countries' native languages may not be the
first
 task someone wants to do as nearly anyone who decides to leave their homeland knows English same as the public in other nations.
Therefore
, as both communities know a language which they can communicate with they can do their typical stuff
such
 as shopping and even studying. As an illustration, in Turkey,
besides
 their mother ,tongue the majority of them are able to have conversations with tourists, and foreign
people
 due to knowing English.
However
, unfortunately, in some nations and even cities especially,
third
 world counties some may act racist and rude to
people
 who do not know their way of speaking.
Thus
, it can causes issues as they do not welcome them and even make them struggle with their daily needs like buying food from a restaurant.
For instance
, in Iran, there are few
people
 who avoid having conversations with the ones who do not talk in Turkish.
Furthermore
, on some occasions, even basic things can be difficult as we cannot understand foreign languages which
causes
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people
 to suffer from mental issues as they cannot do entertaining stuff in their leisure time or even some may find it hard to socialize as they do not know the common cultural things or what other communities find interesting.To exemplify, as we can see on different shows, every country has its own way of speaking and even jokes related to its culture. In conclusion, I consider,
this
 belief that not knowing some nation's
first
 language can cause some serious harm as it may be hard to communicate with others or do daily routine stuff.
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